Welcome to Chapter 3.
Overview
In the last two chapters, you've learned and practised
the first two stages of the Writing Process: Plan and
Organise.
In this chapter, you'll look at the next two stages:
Draft and Revise. Together, these two stages take the most time. Writing the
first draft takes less time than revising. You'll focus on writing the first
draft and taking the first step in revising your
draft.
Plan to Organise to Draft
to Revise
This course is based on the Writing Process, a
step-by-step procedure for producing effective correspondence. Therefore, HSBC
recommends that you study each chapter of this course in order, beginning with
the introductory chapter "Getting Started".
Objectives
In this chapter, you'll start working on a writing
project.
As you do so, you'll be able to
l
draft a
letter and
l
revise your
letters to make them complete.
Planning and Organising: A Quick Review
In the first two stages of the Writing Process, you plan
and organise what you're going to write.
In planning, you decide
-
why you are writing (writer's
purpose)
-
how your reader will respond (reader's
response)
-
what your reader needs to know (reader's
information).
You then organise your plan by creating an
outline.
Drafting: Before You Begin
In this chapter, you'll begin to write a letter. As you
write this letter, you'll work through all five stages of the Writing Process.
LETTER TO MR PERRY: THE SITUATION
The letter you will write is based on the following
situation:
Situation:
Our customer, Mr Robert Perry, deposited a cheque through
'Quick Deposit' into his Premier account. Unfortunately, the name on the cheque
(the bearer's name) was not exactly the same as the name on the account. The
name on the cheque was Mr Robert Pery (instead of Perry). As a result, the money
was not credited to Mr Perry's account.
Solution:
Mr Perry needs to ask the drawer to write another cheque,
making sure the name is exactly the same as on the account card. Then, the money
can be deposited into his account.
LETTER TO MR PERRY: THE TASK
You are a Customer Relationship Officer. Although there
is a standard form to deal with this situation, your manager has asked you to
write a letter to Mr Perry, as he is a valued customer.
Mr Perry's details are as
follows:
Address:
Flat 3A, Bayshore Tower, Mary's Point, Vancouver
Account no:
613 556556 888
Cheque no: 60263
Payee name: Mr R Pery
Name on account record: Mr R Perry
What will you do next? Think about
this...
You're not going to start writing immediately, are you?
Remember: there are five stages in the Writing Process.
You always need to begin with the first stage.
LETTER TO MR PERRY: PLANNING
What should you do first? You should plan what to
write!
Do you remember the 3 strategies you use when planning to
write?
The 3 strategies in planning
are
-
WHY are you writing to Mr Perry? (ie the Writer's
Purpose)
-
WHAT do you want Mr Perry to do? (ie the Reader's
Response)
-
WHAT does Mr Perry need to know? (ie the Reader's
Information).
LETTER TO MR PERRY: PLANNING
How did you do? Here is a suggested plan:
Suggested Answer
Writer's Purpose
- To
explain the situation (why the cheque was not accepted)
- To propose
/ suggest a solution
Reader's Response
- To
understand why the cheque was not accepted
- To accept
our suggestion
Reader's Information
- The name
on the cheque needs to match the name on the account card
- The writer
of the cheque needs to issue another cheque with the correct name
Remember to always keep your plan with you as your guide.
This will ensure that you get the results you want from your
writing.
LETTER TO MR PERRY: ORGANISING
Now that you've completed your plan, you need to organise
it.
Do you remember the five sections of a
letter?
To help you recall these
sections:
Salutation
Opening (Background &
Purpose)
Facts (Reader's Information)
Action (Reader's Response)
Remarks
LETTER TO MR PERRY: ORGANISING
How did you do?
Suggested Outline
Salutation:
Dear Mr Perry
Opening:
refer to "Quick Deposit"
cheque
apologise that cheque cannot be accepted
writing to explain situation
and suggest solution
Facts:
explain that name was
misspelled
explain that name on cheque
needs to match name on account card
Action:
ask the writer of the cheque to issue another one
Remarks:
hope information is useful
Now that you have completed your outline, you're ready to
move on to the next stage in the Writing Process. 下次還有更精彩的哦！
（來源：中國物流論壇 實習生江巍 英語點津 Annabel 編輯）
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